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IF YOU'RE INTERESTED IN THE STORY, PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT WITH AT LEAST A SMILEY FACE ON IT, SO I CAN TRACK HOW MANY PEOPLE ARE FOLLOWING IT. THANKS. :D :D :D

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Please comment. Feedback is most definitely welcome and suggestions will be taken into consideration. Though be polite about it. =D And PLEASE do not steal. >.<


Yay! On time. ^^ At 9:22pm, but still! On the right day. ^_^ Enjoy.


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SO FAR:
THE WAREHOUSE:
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CHAPTER ONE: THE BROTHERHOOD:

Prev--> Page 4: [link]
Pres--> Page 5: [link] <-You are here. ^-^
Next--> Page 6: [link]



Pages updated every Thursday, hopefully. @_@

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© 2007 TARA-LYNN SHARROCK
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
It isn't bad at all. I haven't finished reading yet ... I think it's good to have humour/double entendre. I was a Batman and Superman Comic fan as a kid - it's how I learnt to read. The stories were full of that sort of thing. Do you know about MONOMYTH? [link] That's a good start. JK Rowling is said to have used that structure too. It's the basic structure for success. I think it's deeply embedded in our genetic memory to want a monomyth. It may help with your structure if you don't already know about it. :)
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
hehe I like the Double Entendre "Grossly overdone, Don'tcha think?" well I took it that way... that droid and drama were both excessive! 'Made me laugh! :)
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kaiverta Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Haha yeah. It's really bad. I'm redoing the whole manga in-between commissions. :) Thank you so much for all your comments/for reading.
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011
Gee - I think it's great... the visuals are on the whole very arresting. Some of the words need work...but that will come
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wisewolf25 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2008
:)
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HylianLycan Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
scary 0_0... ignore the sadness emote, I clicked it on accident
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vilhelmina Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2007  Student Digital Artist

He grabbed the pretty hair! D:

((I know, my comments are just getting weirder. o_O))
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NightmareGK13 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2007  Student Digital Artist
:D
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Vueiy-Visarelli Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Razur-The-Wox Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007
:D Well, I decided to read this for the hey of it. Seems pretty good so far.
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ashleyjordan Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really cool. I love Solitary's eyes and hair and how you were able to make 43 grasp his hair realisticly. Is this your story and have you written it out or is this a fanfiction made by somebody else? Also, if you did write a story about it, what is the link(if there is a link)?
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kaiverta Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist Artist
It's my story. Everything in the story from the number of panels to the way a character's mouth is shaped is created by me. ^^ My storyline, too. I wrote and illustrated it all.
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ashleyjordan Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
Oooh...its' nice. Have you written a story of it? If not, I really think you should because then people following along can read it(you can post it on DA as a writing) and then maybe people would be even more interested and know what's going on(also, I don't know all of the character's names, even from looking through all of the pages...the only ones I kow is Solidary(sp?) and Forty Three). Anyways, thanks for replying and keep up the good work
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kaiverta Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist Artist
Well, I'm doing it that way on purpose. Keeping people from knowing who is who. ^^ unfortunately, you can't really put names above characters' heads or in their speech bubbles in manga cause it looks funny, and they haven't all spoken yet, nor to each other, otherwise they'd mention names. But thanks for the suggestion. ^^ I'll let you know who is who in future pages, hopefully soon.
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ashleyjordan Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay thanks very much. I look forward to reading it. It comes out on Thursdays, right? Well that's if your running on time, ne?^^
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kaiverta Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2007  Hobbyist Artist
Yep. ^^; I'm really trying to keep sending a new page out every Thursday. Thanks so much for supporting me! D D
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ashleyjordan Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem. Also, I don't mind or even care if you are late in making a new page because I'm sure it takes a lot of work and time to make this comic. I also would rather have you take your time and make it great instead of rushing it...
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viralsanctity Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2007
Gar!
Great job with the hair-grabby looking drawing thing! Yet another thing that would really trouble me if I had to draw it. D:
I love that guy's face in the last panel. xD
He's like ooh~ armpit. 8D
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KeightYlonen Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2007
I like that of only coloring the eyes... it gives it a ...something that I like nwn je...
and by the way, the link for the next page doesn't work. it says 'the file cannot be found' or something along the lines... T-T great work!
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Larecia Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2007   Digital Artist
*_______* CLIFFHANGER CLIFFHANGER CLIFFHANGLER.
















+favs
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Chaos-Flower Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
Flower: Wow, great tension. ^^ I love your style - the way only the eyes are coloured in... the characters are all easily distinguishable too. I'm loving the concept, too... looking forward to the next update~!

~Chaos Flower
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D8K Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2007
Oooomg! This is so well drawn... Y_Y I am still so in love with the style you have here, and the drama definately agrees with my over active imagination! I soo cant wait until the next one.

*drools* Did someone say pie? *looks around*

This definately beats pie... maybe not chocolate pie, but its damn close.

Beautiful, as always. *envy* I'll be waiting on the edge of my seat until next release!
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raumthemad Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2007
I love this series!
Almost as much as pie!
:drool:
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sable-ambiguity Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2007
Great cliffhanger again. D:
That grip on his hair look so painful. Gaha. ;~;

Must...wait...another week...
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sable-ambiguity Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2007
Err. Looks.*

See, I was so distressed, I lost the ability to spell.
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