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-T.W. CH.1. Pg, 5- by kaiverta -T.W. CH.1. Pg, 5- by kaiverta
IF YOU'RE INTERESTED IN THE STORY, PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT WITH AT LEAST A SMILEY FACE ON IT, SO I CAN TRACK HOW MANY PEOPLE ARE FOLLOWING IT. THANKS. :D :D :D

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Please comment. Feedback is most definitely welcome and suggestions will be taken into consideration. Though be polite about it. =D And PLEASE do not steal. >.<


Yay! On time. ^^ At 9:22pm, but still! On the right day. ^_^ Enjoy.


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SO FAR:
THE WAREHOUSE:
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CHAPTER ONE: THE BROTHERHOOD:

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Pages updated every Thursday, hopefully. @_@

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© 2007 TARA-LYNN SHARROCK
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
It isn't bad at all. I haven't finished reading yet ... I think it's good to have humour/double entendre. I was a Batman and Superman Comic fan as a kid - it's how I learnt to read. The stories were full of that sort of thing. Do you know about MONOMYTH? [link] That's a good start. JK Rowling is said to have used that structure too. It's the basic structure for success. I think it's deeply embedded in our genetic memory to want a monomyth. It may help with your structure if you don't already know about it. :)
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2011
hehe I like the Double Entendre "Grossly overdone, Don'tcha think?" well I took it that way... that droid and drama were both excessive! 'Made me laugh! :)
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kaiverta Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Haha yeah. It's really bad. I'm redoing the whole manga in-between commissions. :) Thank you so much for all your comments/for reading.
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SimoneStarr Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2011
Gee - I think it's great... the visuals are on the whole very arresting. Some of the words need work...but that will come
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wisewolf25 Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2008
:)
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HylianLycan Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
scary 0_0... ignore the sadness emote, I clicked it on accident
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vilhelmina Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2007  Student Digital Artist

He grabbed the pretty hair! D:

((I know, my comments are just getting weirder. o_O))
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NightmareGK13 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2007  Student Digital Artist
:D
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Vueiy-Visarelli Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Razur-The-Wox Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007
:D Well, I decided to read this for the hey of it. Seems pretty good so far.
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